My Reflection about me being in our new learning space

My Reflection About Learning in our New Learning            

                   Environment

The start of Term 3 we moved into our new learning environment. We started with art. We usually start with inquiry writing or reading but almost this whole five days we’ve been doing art,we were learning about bold lines and contrasting colour about any image with our learning team

I was good at finishing on time before we pack up and getting ready to go home I was focused about every five days well  because art is my favourite subject.

I got better at finishing my work quickly last term I couldn't even finish one thing from our learning plan but now in our new environment I can finish my work just like that.

Sometimes I don’t like when we work together with the other classroom cause in our new learning environment we have two room   the name of those two new classroom is called  room Tuakana   that name Tuakana the represent our name Nghati Aroha, the true thing that I hate about this classroom I get confused because when we a on the mat  the other class just stands up and starts to talk   but couldn't hear what Kate talking about   what’s the story about or what’s happening in the story.

I like having the oven in our room   because when the chefs cooks I like the smell of the cooking and after that we get to eat it at lunch or they can just be greedy and just keep it for themselves.

poem learning storie

                         The Vacation

   The The bright reflection of the sun on our shades,

The waves hit our feet as toe walked :t the white sand,

The breeze of thick cool air was just right,

Made us feel relaxed like we were on vacation,       

The salty fish and chips and nice cold ice cream made our taste buds feel like they were in heaven,

Our emotions had the best time of their lives,

The sunset went back to where it came from,

Then we snoozed and snoozed till the next morning.

By Kepoe and Laumua

This was the feedback that we got back from our teacher

Gemma gray’s comment:Talofa boys! Well done this is a great poem! You have used similes to help your reader visualise and to feel like they are there. You have also included some good adjectives. Well done! There are two suggestions I have for you both to have a think about... the first is that you have switched between writing in the past and writing in the present throughout the poem. I suggest that you stick to just one, for example, "the waves hit (writing about the past) as we walk (writing about the present/what is happening at that moment) through sand". If this is confusing I can explain it more to you, but have a go at working through your awesome poem and making sure that this is consistent Also what can you change your title to that will give your readers a hint about what your poem will be about?

We were good  at using powerful  verb in our poems like this  one EG:  the waves hit our feet as our toes go through  the white sand.

I was good using personification I was describing how the  person took a bite of the fish then I wrote that his taste buds were  in heaven.

I got better at adjectives because I was describing the peacefulness of the beach like the sun was too bright that my shades were shining.

I felt happy because when I was writing this poem reminds me of the island of Samoa

Both of us need get better at  working together and come up whole lots of ideas so when we  other people read it the will think it a cool.